My name is Yearim Cha and my English name is Yenny. I was interested in this writing system with blogs. I am good at singing and drawing. My best subject is music and art, and I always wait for the day having my favorite subject. But I am also good at having my own blog and share each other's ideas or writings. I made my blog in naver and switch my idea with my blog friends. I also made a friend with my blog. I was glad to hear that one of my favorite hobby, blog, would be using in the writing class, and I was excited with this writing class, and also other's writings on their blogs. I wish other students in my class would also make their blogs and share each other's writings.
My hobby is listening to the music, such as K-Pop. I also listen to the music before I go to sleep. Because I love singing, and also listening to the music, know more about K-Pop stars or songs. I love to follow the rhythms of the song, but I also love to follow the dance of the K-Pop songs. Not only me, but all of the worlds fascinating with K-Pop songs and groups. Because of this, there are huge fans of K-Pop.
Hi Yenny,
답글삭제Nice to meet you. I like your name! Very original.
I can tell from your first blog post that you have experience with this. Everything looks great and you paid a lot of attention to detail. Great job!
Your three paragraphs are great. I wonder - is one a lie?
As for grammar, also very good. But I found one sentence that has a few problems:
"My hobby is to listening to the music, such as K-Pops."
Should be:
My hobby is listening to music, such as K-pop.
You don't need to make music or K-pop plural. Like rice and water, it is already plural.
Good post! Welcome to KMLA. I'm sure you'll love GLPS.
Hi, I'm Sin Tae your writing TA.
답글삭제I liked how you organized in paragraphs. It seems that each paragraph is clearly talking about one topic, which is very good.
Keep up the good work! I expect to see interesting posts from your blog.
Hi Yenny:) I'm Jiyoung, your writing TA. Your writing is very interesting. I liked the natural flow of your writing. Nice and clear, little grammatical mistakes. Hope to see your other writings as well:)
답글삭제My name is Yearim Cha and my English name is Yenny. I'm highly interested in this writing system with blogs. I am good at singing and drawing. My best subject is music and art, and I always wait for the day of taking classes of my favorite subject. But I am also good at keeping my own blog and sharing other's ideas and writings. I made my blog in Naver and shared my idea with my blog friends. I also made friends through my blog. I was glad to hear that one of my favorite hobby, blogging, would be used in the writing class, and I was excited with this writing class as well. I also like reading others' writings on their blogs. I wish other students in my class make their blogs and share their writings.
답글삭제I am sixth grade student in Seoul SIndong Elementary school. I live with my parents, without any siblings. Thus, my parents give me all of their love and affection. When I came to GLPS camp, they were first worried about how I could stay (or survive) in this camp without any parental attention. Sometimes their sincere care helps me, but they are making me confused as well. However, I also feel lonely at home because there's nobody who can help me or whom I can play with, when my parents are on their work. Therefore, I think that being with my friend is the most important thing in my life
My hobby is listening to music, such as K-Pop. I listen to music before I go to sleep. Because I love singing and listening to music, I know muxh about K-Pop stars or songs. I love to hum the rhythms of the songs and also love to follow the dances of the K-Pop music. Not only I but all of the world's K pop fans are fascinated by K-Pop songs and singers. So, there are lots of K-Pop fans all around the world.
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